OK so to start off, I think my main focus was trying to add a few more pages to my story. The hardest part was trying to remember what I had originally wrote out for the plot. I think I got most of it, but I honestly remembered more things happening near the end of the first chapter.
In saying this I looked through most everyones reviews looking for any grammatical errors, and anything having to do with structure.
As far as taking criticism for everyone I tried to compare everyones thoughts with Ms. Fried’ comments. Which for the most part everything lined up, some of the comments had more details attached to them, and vice versa.
I had some help with my creativity when I added to the chapter, so I can't take all the credit. My girlfriend put in some time looking over it, as well as my mother. This being said my computer decided it wanted to suck, and crashed right before I saved their proofreading it. So I gotta go back and re-re-edit it but oh well such it life and I guess I can't be to upset it honestly could've crashed completely and I wouldn't have anything to show.
I like the twist at the end, but honestly, I would have liked to have added it in later on in the story. I really want to go back before the prolog and start from there but in the time crunch that I put myself in, I couldn't figure out how to change it to much from where it was already. So hopefully I can add that in when I resubmit it in April.
